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bug#11862: [PATCH 9/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Use passive voice
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Eli Zaretskii |
Subject: |
bug#11862: [PATCH 9/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Use passive voice |
Date: |
Thu, 05 Jul 2012 19:37:55 +0300 |
> From: Stephen Berman <stephen.berman@gmx.net>
> Date: Thu, 05 Jul 2012 16:04:22 +0200
> Cc: 11862@debbugs.gnu.org
>
> On Thu, 05 Jul 2012 06:14:00 -0400 Richard Stallman <rms@gnu.org> wrote:
>
> > The value of this variable is the version of Emacs being run. It is a
> > string such as @code{"23.1.1"}. The last number in this string is not
> > really part of the Emacs release version number; it is incremented
> > -each time you build Emacs in any given directory. A value with four
> > +each time Emacs is built in any given directory.
> >
> > Please use the active voice by preference.
> > For instance, you could write it this:
> >
> > each time you build Emacs in a given directory, that increments this
> > number.
>
> This sounds rather awkward to me. Would you accept "it gets
> incremented" as a "more active passive" alternative?
I think there's a better alternative that is entirely active:
each build of Emacs in any given directory increments that number.
> Aside from style, the statement is inaccurate, isn't it? At least
> with "make bootstrap" the last number is always 1.
Yes. So:
The value of this variable is the version of Emacs being run. It
is a string such as @code{"23.1.1"}. The last number in this
string is not really part of the Emacs release version number; it
starts at 1, is reset to 1 by @kbd{make bootstrap}, and each build
of Emacs increments that number.
bug#11862: [PATCH 6/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Re-fill a paragraph, Michael Witten, 2012/07/04
bug#11862: [PATCH 9/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Use passive voice, Michael Witten, 2012/07/04
bug#11862: [PATCH 0/9] doc/lispref/intro.texi: Copyediting, Stefan Monnier, 2012/07/04