Re: [v2 1/1] doc: Show how to boot result of 'vm-image'.

[Ludovic Courtès]

Leo Famulari <address@hidden> skribis:

> * doc/guix.texi (Running GuixSD in a VM): New node.
> (Invoking guix system): Add reference to 'Running GuixSD in a VM'.

[...]

> address@hidden Running GuixSD in a VM
> address@hidden Running GuixSD in a VM

s/VM/virtual machine/ on the second line.

> +One way to run GuixSD in a virtual machine is to build a GuixSD virtual

After “virtual machine”, add “(VM)” to introduce the acronym.

> +machine image using @command{guix system vm-image} (@pxref{Invoking guix
> +system}). The returned image is in qcow2 format, which the
           ^^
Please make sure that all the end-of-sentence periods are followed by
two spaces or a newline (info "(texinfo) Not Ending a Sentence").

> +$ qemu-system-x86_64 \
> +-net user -net nic,model=virtio \
> +-enable-kvm -m 256 /tmp/qemu-image

Would be nice to align the 2nd and 3rd line below the ‘e’ of ‘qemu’.

> +And the annotated version:

Maybe “Here is what each of these options means:”.

> +x86_64, you can get a list of available NIC models by running
> +`qemu-system-x86_64 -net nic,model=help`.

Instead of backquotes, use @command{…}.

> address@hidden -enable-kvm
> +If your system has hardware virtualization extensions, enabling the
> +kernel virtual machine will make things run faster.

s/kernel virtual machine/Linux kernel's virtual machine support (KVM)/

> address@hidden -m 256
> +RAM available to the guest OS, in megabytes. Defaults to 128 megabytes,
> +which is not enough for the Guix daemon.

“Defaults to address@hidden, which may be insufficient for some
operations.”  (It’s not the daemon specifically, it’s mostly if you want
to run X + Xfce, for instance.  The former ‘guix substitute’ used to
take quite a lot of memory, but I think that’s no longer the case since
we switched to HTTP pipelining.)

> address@hidden /tmp/qemu-image
> +The filesystem path of the qcow2 image.

s/filesystem path/file name/

OK with these changes, thanks a lot!

Ludo’.