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Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper
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David Kastrup |
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Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper |
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Sun, 21 Apr 2013 15:52:49 +0200 |
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Peter Wannemacher <address@hidden> writes:
> Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper
> From: Urs Liska
> Subject: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper
> Date: Fri, 19 Apr 2013 23:17:08 +0200
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> Hi,
>
> I like the tone of the paper, but I think it might be a bit long.
>
> I have some grammatical observations below. I will make more if they
> are helpful.
>
>
>
> ======================
> You wrote on page 4:
> Editor independent
> There isn’t a inseparable unit between editing and processing a docu-
>
> It is common to write:
> There isn't an inseparable unit
And not "between" but rather "of editing and processing".
> ========================
> In-place comments
> Practically all plain text formats allow to enter comments inside the
>
>
> I would write:
> Practically all plain text formats allow you to enter comments inside the
> or
> Practically all plain text formats allow one to enter comments inside the
> or
> Practically all plain text formats allow the user to enter comments
> inside the
... allow entering comments ...
... admit comments inside of ...
--
David Kastrup
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, (continued)
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Urs Liska, 2013/04/23
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, David Kastrup, 2013/04/23
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Carl Peterson, 2013/04/22
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Christ van Willegen, 2013/04/23
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, David Kastrup, 2013/04/23
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Jan Nieuwenhuizen, 2013/04/24
re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Peter Wannemacher, 2013/04/21
- Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper,
David Kastrup <=
Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Klaus Föhl, 2013/04/22
Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Klaus Föhl, 2013/04/22
Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Klaus Föhl, 2013/04/23
Re: Request for feedback on 'lobbying' paper, Klaus Föhl, 2013/04/23