[Office-commits] r9654 - trunk/campaigns/windows7sins

[sysadmin]

Author: mattl
Date: Wed Sep 23 11:21:48 2009
New Revision: 9654

Log:
second draft

Modified:
   trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn

Modified: trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn
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+++ trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn        Wed Sep 23 11:21:48 
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@@ -1,31 +1,29 @@
-Test.
-
 Dear ___
 
 ## Re: Important notice regarding impending lack of privacy, freedom and 
security from Microsoft Corporation.
 
-As a decision maker within your organization, you undoubtedly strive to
-make choices that seek to improve the working lives of your employees,
-enhance the relationship you have with your customers and potential
-customers and secure the independence and freedom for your organization
-to operate.
-
-For many years, companies like yours have relied on Microsoft and the
-Windows operating system. With the release of Windows 7 in October,
-Microsoft is selling the new version on a combination of fear and
-threats. They threaten to stop supporting older versions of Windows in
-the long-term, and because their system is proprietary (not free/libre), you 
are
-dependent on them to provide regular security updates and fixes. With
-the threat to withdraw their support, they try to strong-arm you into
-adopting new versions of their software even when you don't need them
-and may have a negative consequence to your ability to operate, once
-again abusing its monopoly position, explicitly inducing vendor lock-in.
-
-Like its plans to include DRM restrictions with Windows Vista,
-Microsoft's continued attacks against the security, privacy and freedom
-of your organization, are no mistake. Microsoft has a history of
-manipulating computer manufacturers into installing its products onto
-the computers you purchase.
+As a decision maker within your organization, you undoubtedly strive
+to make choices that seek to improve the working lives of your
+employees, enhance the relationship you have with your stakeholders
+and potential customers and secure the independence and freedom for
+your organization to operate.
+
+For many years, organizations like yours have relied on Microsoft and
+the Windows operating system, and because they threaten to stop
+supporting older versions of Windows in the long-term, and because
+their system is proprietary (not free/libre), you are dependent on
+them to provide regular security updates and fixes. With the threat to
+withdraw their support, they try to strong-arm you into adopting new
+versions of their software even when you don't need them and may have
+a negative consequence to your ability to operate effectively, once
+again abusing its monopoly position, explicitly inducing vendor
+lock-in.
+
+As with Windows Vista, Windows 7 represents Microsoft's continued
+attacks against the security, privacy and freedom of your
+organization, are no mistake. Microsoft has a history of manipulating
+computer manufacturers into installing its products onto the computers
+you purchase.
 
 With its most recent actions, it further threatens computing standards
 by polluting and perverting the OpenDocument standard with its own
@@ -34,18 +32,21 @@
 Because of Microsoft, many decision makers in America are now wholly
 dependent on the Windows operating system for their business computing.
 
-**The root cause of this dependency is proprietary software (not free/libre) 
and with the
-release of Windows7, you have an opportunity to break your organization's
-dependency on it.**
-
-Free software is about freedom not price. Free software is software that you 
can use and adapt independent of any one vendor, such as the GNU/Linux 
operating system or the business
-productivity suite OpenOffice.  Free software provides all of the freedoms 
Microsoft
-tries to deny, and is therefore better in all areas: security,
-accountability and monetary cost. GNU/Linux and OpenOffice are available
-from numerous vendors ensuring competition for your patronage and your freedom
-to change supplier.
+**The root cause of this dependency is proprietary software (not
+free/libre) and with the release of Windows 7, you have an opportunity
+to break your organization's dependency on it.**
+
+**Free software is about freedom, and not price.** Free software is
+software that you can use and adapt independent of any one vendor,
+such as the GNU/Linux operating system or the business productivity
+suite OpenOffice.org. Free software provides all of the freedoms
+Microsoft tries to deny, and is therefore better in all areas:
+security, accountability and monetary cost. GNU/Linux and
+OpenOffice.org are available from numerous vendors ensuring
+competition for your patronage and your freedom to change supplier.
 
-Microsoft's recent 10-K reports (June 30th, 2009) speak of free software and 
tell a similar story:
+Microsoft's recent 10-K reports (June 30th, 2009) speak of free
+software and tell a similar story:
 
 >"The OpenOffice.org project provides a freely downloadable
 >cross-platform application that also has been adapted by various
@@ -53,28 +54,27 @@
 >IBM, Novell, Red Hat, and Sun Microsystems."
 
 >"Despite these efforts, actual or perceived security vulnerabilities
->in our products could lead some customers to seek to return
->products, to reduce or delay future purchases, or to use competing
->products."
+>in our products could lead some customers to seek to return products,
+>to reduce or delay future purchases, or to use competing products."
 
 Free software is more secure because you and the wider community are
-independently able to read the source code of and customize any program
-you use in your infrastructure. It saves you from relying on a secretive
-third party, and the public availability of free software code means
-that many qualified eyeballs, the security experts and researchers
-around the world, are continually studying and reporting on its
-integrity. 
-
-Replacing all your desktop systems with GNU/Linux will give
-you independence from Microsoft, access to thousands of free software 
applications, and
-help break the social ill of proprietary software. Thousands of
-organizations have already moved to free software. What's your
-organizational plan?
+independently able to read the source code of and customize any
+program you use in your infrastructure. It saves you from relying on a
+secretive third party, and the public availability of free software
+code means that many qualified eyeballs, the security experts and
+researchers around the world, are continually studying and reporting
+on its integrity.
+
+Replacing all your desktop systems with GNU/Linux will give you
+independence from Microsoft, access to thousands of free software
+applications, and help break the social ill of proprietary
+software. Thousands of organizations have already moved to free
+software. What's your organizational plan?
 
 **Investing in Microsoft's Windows 7 will only get you more stuck and
 more dependent on them.**
 
 Take the next step -- evaluate your organization's opportunity to use
 free software -- and sign up for regular announcements on making the
-move away from Windows and to receive information about the work of the
-Free Software Foundation: <http://windows7sins.org/signup>.
+move away from Windows and to receive information about the work of
+the Free Software Foundation: <http://windows7sins.org/signup>.