[Office-commits] r9777 - trunk/campaigns/windows7sins

[sysadmin]

Author: www-data
Date: Tue Sep 29 12:40:13 2009
New Revision: 9777

Log:
web commit by peterb

Modified:
   trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn

Modified: trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn
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--- trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn        Tue Sep 29 12:36:18 
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+++ trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/letter-ngo.mdwn        Tue Sep 29 12:40:13 
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@@ -21,15 +21,11 @@
 
 As with Windows Vista, Windows 7 represents Microsoft's continued
 attacks against the security, privacy and freedom of your organization,
-are no mistake. Microsoft has a history of manipulating computer
+and are no mistake. Microsoft has a history of manipulating computer
 manufacturers into installing its products onto the computers you purchase.
 
-With its most recent actions, it threatened computing standards by
-polluting and perverting the OpenDocument standard with its own
-XML-based file format.
-
 Because of Microsoft, many decision makers in the not-for-profit sector
-are wholly dependent on the Windows operating system for their business
+are wholly dependent on the Windows operating system for their organizational
 computing.
 
 **The root cause of this dependency is proprietary software (not