[Office-commits] r9811 - trunk

[sysadmin]

Author: jrasata
Date: Tue Sep 29 16:51:55 2009
New Revision: 9811

Log:
various small changes

Modified:
   trunk/appeal-text.mdwn

Modified: trunk/appeal-text.mdwn
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--- trunk/appeal-text.mdwn      Tue Sep 29 16:34:21 2009        (r9810)
+++ trunk/appeal-text.mdwn      Tue Sep 29 16:51:55 2009        (r9811)
@@ -1,18 +1,16 @@
 Dear Free Software Supporter,
 
-Tomorrow we mark the end of our year long celebration of the 25th anniversary 
of the GNU project, a celebration that we kicked off in September 2008 with a 
wonderful video from author and comedian Stephen Fry http://www.gnu.org/fry/. 
+Tomorrow we mark the end of our year-long celebration of the 25th anniversary 
of the GNU Project---a celebration that we kicked off in September 2008 with a 
wonderful video from author and comedian Stephen Fry (http://www.gnu.org/fry/). 
 
-Today, we celebrate the fact that we have passed 25,000 subscribers to our 
monthly newsletter, the Free Software Supporter http://www.fsf.org/fss, and we 
thank the 3,200 individuals who have joined the FSF as Associate Members and 
who are responsible for funding all our work. 
+Today, we celebrate the fact that we have passed 25,000 subscribers to our 
monthly newsletter, the Free Software Supporter (http://www.fsf.org/fss), and 
we thank the 3,200 individuals who have joined the Free Software Foundation as 
Associate Members and who are responsible for funding all our work. 
 
-Becoming a card carrying FSF Associate Member ($10 a month, $5 for students)
-Already a member? Give a gift membership to a friend
-Or referring a friend to join - and receive recognition
+Become a card-carrying FSF Associate Member (at $10 a month, $5 if you are a 
student). Already a member? Give a gift membership to a friend, or refer a 
friend---and receive recognition when they join.
 
-I am proud that the Free Software Foundation has so many dedicated activists 
and members, who every day voice their support for our mission and advocate for 
a free society.
+I am proud that the FSF has so many dedicated activists and members, who every 
day voice their support for our mission and advocate for a free society.
 
-The Free Software Movement has had an excellent year, and awareness of the 
ethical importance of free software is growing.  With your support the FSF will 
continue to sponsor the GNU project and build capacity as an organization, and 
we will communicate, work with, and meet the needs of the free software 
community. Together, we fight to remove the unjust yolk of proprietary 
software, software patents, DRM and Treachorous Computing, and work to build a 
world of free software where we the users are free.
+The free software movement has had an excellent year, and awareness of the 
ethical importance of free software is growing.  With your support, the FSF 
will continue to sponsor the GNU Project and build capacity as an organization, 
and we will communicate, work with, and meet the needs of the free software 
community. Together, we fight to remove the unjust yolk of proprietary 
software, software patents, DRM, and Treachorous Computing, and work to build a 
world of free software where we the users are free.
 
-"I could have made money this way, and perhaps amused myself writing code. But 
I knew that at the end of my career, I would look back on years of building 
walls to divide people, and feel I had spent my life making the world a worse 
place." Richard Stallman http://www.gnu.org/gnu/thegnuproject.html
+"I could have made money [by joining the proprietary software world], and 
perhaps amused myself writing code. But I knew that at the end of my career, I 
would look back on years of building walls to divide people, and feel I had 
spent my life making the world a worse place." Richard Stallman 
(http://www.gnu.org/gnu/thegnuproject.html)
 
 Sincerely,