[Office-commits] r10029 - trunk/campaigns/windows7sins

[sysadmin]

Author: www-data
Date: Tue Oct  6 16:59:10 2009
New Revision: 10029

Log:
web commit by peterb

Modified:
   trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/pr-piece.mdwn

Modified: trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/pr-piece.mdwn
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--- trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/pr-piece.mdwn  Tue Oct  6 16:50:09 2009        
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+++ trunk/campaigns/windows7sins/pr-piece.mdwn  Tue Oct  6 16:59:10 2009        
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@@ -14,7 +14,7 @@
 their customers and shareholders of avoiding proprietary software.
 
 Today, we are asking the leaders of the most influential
-nongovernmental organizations (NGOs) worldwide, asking them to make
+nongovernmental organizations (NGOs) worldwide to make
 the switch to freedom-respecting free software, and to help foster
 awareness of the ethical importance of computer user freedom.
 
@@ -51,10 +51,9 @@
 software.
 
 As with Windows Vista, Windows 7 represents Microsoft's continued
-attacks against the security, privacy and freedom of your
-organization, and are no mistake. Microsoft has a history of
+attacks against our security, privacy and freedom, and are no mistake. 
Microsoft has a history of
 manipulating computer manufacturers into installing its products onto
-the computers you purchase.
+the computers we all purchase.
 
 Today, we're asking leaders in the nonprofit sector to switch to the
 free software GNU/Linux operating system for all their desktop and
@@ -62,33 +61,12 @@
 
 Free software, such as GNU/Linux is about freedom, and not price. 
 
-Free software is software that you can use and adapt independent of
-any one vendor and free software provides all of the freedoms
-Microsoft tries to deny, and is therefore better in all areas:
-security, accountability and monetary cost. 
-
-GNU/Linux and OpenOffice.org are available from numerous vendors
-ensuring competition for your patronage and your freedom to change
-supplier.
-
 Charities, NGOs, and other nonprofit organizations that choose
 proprietary software are undertaking bad public policy, often through
 misinformation or a failure to see their technology choices as
 connected to their social missions. We hope to alert these decision
 makers to the positive contribution they can make to society by
-switching their organizations to free software. I hope these groups
-will make a public policy commitment to freedom and join a growing
-list of organizations who understand that sinking money and time into
-proprietary software is inconsistent with the core values of freedom
-and progress.
-
-Free software is more secure because you, your IT supplier and the
-wider IT community are independently able to read the source code of
-and customize any program you use in your infrastructure. It saves you
-from relying on a secretive third party, and the public availability
-of free software code means that many qualified eyeballs, the security
-experts and researchers around the world, are continually studying and
-reporting on its integrity.
+switching their organizations to free software.
 
 Replacing all your desktop systems with GNU/Linux will give you
 independence from Microsoft, access to thousands of free software