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[Fsfe-uk] m wrote:
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MJ Ray |
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[Fsfe-uk] m wrote: |
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Mon, 02 Oct 2006 12:06:47 +0100 |
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> http://beerandspeech.org/fsfe/bbc-ms-deal/
Comment on second draft, perhaps too late:
I think this paragraph:
Technically the content that Microsoft will deliver
will not be "digital content anytime, anywhere and on
any device" as Bill Gates claims [0]. I would love
that this were true.
is ambiguous and I suggest:
Experience suggests that the content that Microsoft will deliver
technically will not be "digital content anytime, anywhere and on
any device" as Bill Gates claims [0]. I would love that the quote
were true, but it is unlikely to happen if Microsoft's notorious
embrace-and-extend capture is allowed into a BBC partnership.
Small ytpos:
applications that have been licenced by Microsoft for
^^^^^^^^ verb is "licensed"
system you unable to access content on the website.
^^^ missing "will be"?
controlled by a foriegn mega-corporation.
^^ ei ^^ ? to end question
I'd also suggest trying to work in some allusion to the public
value tests and that Microsoft does not work for public value,
but I can't seem to phrase it myself just now.
Hope that helps,
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